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Tuesday 25 February 2014

Lucas's 100 Word Challenge - Week 23

I made my way through the dense undergrowth, droplets of sweat trickling down my forehead. The gash above my leg was agonising but I still hobbled on, machete in one hand I clutched the damson ruby in the other. I found a cave. Its mouth was eroded and worn. Still I grabbed my torch and went down into the darkness. I cascaded into a huge cavern coated in stalactites and stalecmites, I was going to be rich. Suddenly the mouth fell in on me. It was as black as night with my little torch there as a shining star. The debris and rubble made a mountain of it. Pushing through the earth I made my way up...
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8 comments:

  1. Beth26 February 2014 at 08:14

    Wow that is a really great story Lucas! I wish there was more!! You should right a sequel!

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  2. Ella :)28 February 2014 at 06:15

    WOW!!! Amazing use of vocabulary (but I think I need a dictionary for some of those words) this story is very gripping and I want to read more.

    Ella :)

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  3. Ella :)28 February 2014 at 06:16

    WOW!!! Amazing use of vocabulary (but I think I need a dictionary for some of those words) this story is very gripping and I want to read more.

    Ella :)

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  4. Bethan28 February 2014 at 06:16

    Hi Lucas I love your 100 word Challenge good use of descriptive words!! Bethan

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  5. Georgia28 February 2014 at 06:34

    WOW!!! Lucas that's amazing. You've got a great use of vocabulary and you can make a big use out of only 100 words!

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  6. Mrs Prior2 March 2014 at 05:47

    Great story Lucas. It reminded me a little of an Indiana Jones type story. I love your carefully chosen use of vocabulary to really add to the description. I also like how you personified the cave. Well done.

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  7. Lucas's Mum3 March 2014 at 03:24

    Wow Lucas- another amazing story. Looking forward to when you are a famous author.
    Mum

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  8. Mrs Prior6 March 2014 at 06:34

    So proud of you Lucas - you are in this week's 100 word challenge showcase! ! http://100wc.net/category/special-showcase/

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