One boiling hot sunny day, I was on an adventure in a deep jungle. Tall trees surounded me, I heard monkeys shouting loudly and it hurt my ears.
Suddenly, BANG!!! All I heard was a huge bang in the distance. I cut down some bushes, and then I saw a bright light. I ran, ran and ran like heyanes were chasing me! I came to an old temple with drawing up the wall.
I walked in and pressed a collosal button that opened a wall. In front of me I saw gold and diamond. I thought that was the bright light I was following.
Great writing Louis! I like how you used more adventurous vocabulary such as 'surrounded' and 'colossal'. This story reminds me a little of Indiana Jones. It sounds like an action film.
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Mrs P
Well done Louis, an interesting theme for your entry. You used punctuation effectively but I thought your use of vocabulary was more impressive. Well done! Debbie (Team 100WC)
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